Finally have time and brain power to compile my thoughts on the quest.
1. I'm kind of envious of your decision to run your quest without the weight of Exalted's metaplot. I think it made for a lightweight fun story that left me in suspense all the time.
2. I like how Nergui grew as a character over the course of the quest. I even liked his small backslide into alcoholism which has great consequences.
3. My favorite chapter was the Yu-Shan chapter with the first chapter with the Golem fight a close second. (I think the Character Creation chapters are favorites of mine in general). The chapter with the Sun-Blessed was my least favorite, but not because it wasn't well written. I think I got frustrated with how naive they all were.
4. The only criticism I have is almost every choice seems to a heavy choice. What I mean by that is all the choices lead to more problems which lead to more choices with more problems. There was a point with the Sun-Blessed chapter were I was like "Man, everything we do seems to cause problems." It may be better to mix heavy choices with lighter choices to give the heavy choices more impact and have the lighter choices break the tension if needed. Shakespeare was famous for having a light scene after a heavy scene to break the tension.
5. I did like how you varied the dialogue based on the language spoken. Octavia Butler does this in her books sometimes. When someone starts talking in the native dialect of Wild Seed's main characters, she starts the conversation with "Are you well?" instead of "Hello".
Otherwise it was a great quest! I had a lot of fun. I am looking forward to playing Ash.
Also, what was the deal with the Sidereals and the shard?
1. I'm kind of envious of your decision to run your quest without the weight of Exalted's metaplot. I think it made for a lightweight fun story that left me in suspense all the time.
2. I like how Nergui grew as a character over the course of the quest. I even liked his small backslide into alcoholism which has great consequences.
3. My favorite chapter was the Yu-Shan chapter with the first chapter with the Golem fight a close second. (I think the Character Creation chapters are favorites of mine in general). The chapter with the Sun-Blessed was my least favorite, but not because it wasn't well written. I think I got frustrated with how naive they all were.
4. The only criticism I have is almost every choice seems to a heavy choice. What I mean by that is all the choices lead to more problems which lead to more choices with more problems. There was a point with the Sun-Blessed chapter were I was like "Man, everything we do seems to cause problems." It may be better to mix heavy choices with lighter choices to give the heavy choices more impact and have the lighter choices break the tension if needed. Shakespeare was famous for having a light scene after a heavy scene to break the tension.
5. I did like how you varied the dialogue based on the language spoken. Octavia Butler does this in her books sometimes. When someone starts talking in the native dialect of Wild Seed's main characters, she starts the conversation with "Are you well?" instead of "Hello".
Otherwise it was a great quest! I had a lot of fun. I am looking forward to playing Ash.

Also, what was the deal with the Sidereals and the shard?
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